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The English department

English department is one of any departments in Semarang State University. There are two majors in English Department. They are English Education and English Literature which both of them are the most wanted majors that students want to register in. The applicants that want to register in those two majors increase every year. Moreover, this department will have ISO which should be the plus point of this university. Because the certificate of ISO is such an acknowledgment of Semarang State University that it has good performance in educating students. The students are also highly regarded by other students from other faculties of Semarang State University and even students from other universities. They consider English Department of Semarang State University as a qualified major. They know that the alumnus of English Department of Semarang State University have high competence and quality. That's why this department is considered as the most wanted department. 

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4 comments

  1. I think your writing is good. I have some correction for you.
    First about the title, you should write My English Department (begin with capital letters for every words)
    Then, when you wrote: 'There are two majors in English Department. They are English Education and English Literature which both of them are the most wanted majors that students want to register in'.
    you should write: there are teo majors in English Department, they are English Education and English Literature; both of which are the most-wanted majors for students to register in.
    I think that's all, hope your writing will be better.

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  2. Your writing is great. However, from your title, you wrote "The English Department", according to me, it would be better if you put a particular word or feeling that can express your feeling to English Department itself. If you write "The English Department", the meaning can be so general.
    Then, another correction. In your sixth sentence, you put word "because" as the first word of your sentence. I think, it would be better if you change your sentence to "The certificate of ISO is such an acknowledgment of Semarang State University which has good performance in educating students". Thanks.

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  3. You made a good writing, Nuy! :)
    However, I want to give you some comments about your writing. In the first sentence you wrote “English department is one of any departments…”, you can just write “English department is one of departments…”. Since the word ‘any’ is used only in the negative and interrogative sentences.
    Then, the first word in the sixth sentence used ‘because’, whereas the word ‘because’ cannot be used in the beginning of the sentence. You can use ‘since’ instead of ‘because’. Still in the sixth sentence, “…such an acknowledgment of Semarang State University that it has good performance in educating students.” you should delete the word ‘it’.
    Last, in the conclusion sentence, you wrote ‘That’s’ which is the contraction of ‘That is”’. It will be better if you write it completely 'this is'.

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  4. Wow. It is really gorgeous writing Nuy. However, in the fifth sentence, “Moreover, this department will have ISO which should be the plus point of this university.” As Mrs. Zulfa said that English department has been certificated by ISO. So, it will better if you change by the sentence “Moreover, this department has been ISO certificate which give the plus point of this university.”
    Happy writing nuy.

    Thank you
    :)

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